I have restated my thesis.
The number of women workers and the birth rate of Japan is inversely related. In fact, the number of women workers are increasing and the birth rate is decreasing. However, this is in a proportional relation in Sweden. How could Japanese society shift to a proportional relation, by not dropping the number of women workers? → "Japanese society should emulate Sweden’s social system to promote women’s social advancement and increase the birth rate."[thesis statement]
Firstly, there should be more Japanese companies permitting return to work after childcare leave as Sweden companies. By this, It will be much easier for parents to have a baby because women who have jobs won't have to choose either quitting her job and having a baby, or continue working without having a baby.
Next, the Japanese government should promote the childcare support. The country's childcare support is rich in Sweden, but not in Japan. It is difficult for Japanese women to have both a family and a career. Many Japanese women once quits their job after having a baby, but most Swedish women don't. This is because
Finally, male's participation in child-rearing is higher in Sweden. There are two reasons to support this. First, Japanese men's labor hour is too long, which means there's no time for them to participate in child-rearing.. Second, the number of paternity leave is very low in Japan.(higher in Sweden )
